second draft (revised) of ela response

So Katniss Everdeen is a girl who lives in Panem, District 12, her dad is not alive, and her mom is very weak, and she has a little sister named Prim. So Katniss is the one who supports her family. Katniss goes hunting in the woods, the woods are what separate each district, and they are restricted, but Katniss hunts and gathers there. She takes whatever she hunted and takes it to many places, the Hob, where she trades the food for money and other things, the bakery, where she gets a loaf of bread, and money from the mayor, for strawberries.
         So there's this thing called the Hunger Games, it's when a boy and a girl from each district, they go into an arena and they have to kill each other and the last one standing wins, the games have been started when district thirteen started a rebellion against the capitol, and the capitiol beat district thirteen, burned it to ashes, and started the hunger games to show how much power the capitol has. So it's from ages 12-18, and you put a peice of paper with your name when you're 12, and it gets bigger and bigger as you go on, you can also enter your name more than once to get yourself one months worth of oil and grain.
         So It' th day of the reapings, and it's prim's first time with her name in the ballot, and so, Prim gets picked to be the girl representative, and so Katniss takes her place, and the other boy one's name is Peeta Mallark. They came to the capitol to the training facility and where they stay.
         I think that the Hunger Games is a very cruel thing, Firstly because, having fun watching kids no bigger then 18 years old kill each other, also another reason I think it's cruel, is because the capitol doesn't need to send players to the games, so basically, you take all the poor districts besides, 1,2,and 3 and put them in a battle. I also think that it's not fair that a couple of districts and the capitol have all the money, and everyone else are very poor, in the capitol and the rich districts, they have so much money that they can probably give to the other districts and still be filthy rich.